My Favorite Sights
In the world, each country has their own beauty and unique culture.
Everyone has different fond of the beautiful sights, so we will choose dissimilar
country to visit. My favorite sights are in Germany; it is a well development, ancient,
and charming country. Because of these features, Germany is a good place for
you to go and you might be amazed by the splendid sights. I like these sights
because they combine the ancient with modern, just like go into a story to have
the adventure.
Take, for instance, Berlin is the capital of
Germany; it is also the largest city in Germany. As the capital, Berlin is a
world city of economy, politics, culture and science. The eastern part of
Berlin plays the important key of industry. Such as machines manufacture and food
products. On the other hand, the western part of Berlin is a consuming city,
which rely on the West Germany to invest them. Because of Berlin’s history, it
became a serious city. This kind of atmosphere was reflected in their architectures.
You can also visit some opera, theater and philharmonic there, you will enjoy in
it.
Another example is Cologne, which is a
religion and a major culture center. As a result of it’s wonderful position, it
became one of an important inland port in Europe and also the busiest place of
the German railway. In Cologne, it is known for Cologne Cathedral, it is the
third tallest cathedral in the world. It cost 600 years to finish this
magnificent architecture. This cathedral is the style of Gothic, so it is very gorgeous.
The cathedral is one of the famous picture-taking sight for tourists in
Germany. In addition to the appearance of the cathedral, the inner high altar
is also a treasure.
Finally, Frankfurt is a main city of
economy, museums and education. The great writer in Germany is Goethe, who influenced Germany a lot. For example, Frankfurt
University uses Goethe’ s name to name the university. This city is famous for Museumsufer, is the concentration of museums. Through visit those
museums, I realized more about the history and saw a lot of famous works of
art. Frankfurt is also an important city of economy, it was called the economy
capital of Germany and European Union.
I like
the atmosphere of Germany because it combined history, modern, economy,
education and mysterious in such perfect harmony. When I visited those
beautiful sights, it is just like a dream that I go with the great artist and
the ancients
go back to the ancient period, to see the change and develop of the country.
That is the most beautiful sights I have ever seen.
First, I think it is enjoyable to read your essay. You arranged the whole layout of your page carefully, so I think the first impression would be great for readers who visit your blog. In addition, I can feel that you are earnest in writing this essay, because you share different aspects of the cities of Germany. After I read your essay, I can know more about the culture of Germany, and I think it is also a good chance for me to improve my common sense. Then, I would like to share some advices with you:
回覆刪除1. Everyone has different fond of the beautiful sights: “fond” seems to be use as “adjective” rather than “noun”. Ex: be fond of
2. Such as machines manufacture and food products: this might be an incomplete sentence
3. On the other hand, the western part of Berlin is a consuming city, which rely on the West Germany to invest them: “city” is singular, so “rely” might need to become “relies”
4. In Cologne, it is known for Cologne Cathedral, it is the third tallest cathedral in the world: lack of conjunction
5. It cost 600 years to finish this magnificent architecture: cost seems usually to be used for “money”, and I think maybe you can use the word “took”.
6. The cathedral is one of the famous picture-taking sight for tourists in Germany: one of ….a plural noun, so sight might become” sights”
7. Through visit those museums, I realized more about the history and saw a lot of famous works of art: through seems to be a preposition, so “visit” might need to become “ visiting”
8. to see the change and develop of the country: the words “change” and “develop” → ”changes” and “development” would be better